Red-Isabella

Blue is my favourite colour, but today I’m choosing to write about red. There’s lots of red around the classroom. Oilver’s hair, William’s t-shirt, Blake’s shoes, Finlay’s jacket, posters, art and even the back wall of the classroom. My teachers favourite colour is red. yesterday she even went in town and bought a new red shirt and she’s wearing it today. I don’t really understand why she likes red so much. She says she’s always just liked it, even when she was younger. I just did a quick poll in my class and no one else’s favourite colour is red.

11 thoughts on “Red-Isabella”

  1. I think that your story is really good in the part where you named all the facts. Next time try adding more adjectives to make the story more interesting and sound more exciting but overall you did an amazing job well done Isabell Hay:)

  2. I liked your story because you put explanations and you also did a poll to see if anybody is also like your teacher.
    The thing I think you could improve on is putting in capital letters because at the start of sentences its a capital letters, but when it is about when she went town that sentence starts with a lower case y not a capital y.
    I enjoyed it when you said she went town and she got a red top to wear on that day.

  3. I really like it because of your use of jokes.
    You could look out for capital letters.
    Either way it was really good especially with ending with a poll making a joke.

  4. I LIKED YOUR STORY YOU CAN MAKE IT BETTER PUT IT WAS REALLY NICE AND I LIKED IT REALLY NICE YOU CAN PUT PUNCHWAHON AND YOU CAN DO IT REALLY BETTER.

  5. Hi Isabella,

    I liked your short story. It made me laugh. It was entertaining. Be careful about your punctuation and use of “There’s”, which translates to “There is”. Keep writing!

    Regards,
    Steve C

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